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[zhanna]

Hallo an Alle,

bei meiner Hausaufgabe musste ich einen Beitrag über Vor- und Nachteile des TVs schreiben.
Über Eure Korrekturen in der Grammatik und Stilistik würde ich mich sehr freuen.

TV is nowadays one of the most important medium in our daily life. In other words we live in a TV-age. Many people like watching television and mean that TV is a good thing. However the others believe it is a wasted time and has a bad influence. Following I will give you my arguments for and against television.

Today we can watch television 24 hours a day. Many people spend far too much time in front of TV. They watch non-stop one programme after the other instead of going to sport, meeting friends or something like that. Another very important point is that TV gives not enough child protection against Pornography, Violence and Horror films. And last but not least there it too much advertising and propaganda.

However here are the good things to be mentioned too. First of all watching television gives us the possibility to receive information very quickly and be always up to date. Furthermore only television allows us to see what happens in the rest of the world sitting at home. We also can learn much interesting things and be motivated to attempt something new. And secondly TV can also be a good entertainment for whole family and good thing for relaxing after a stressful working day.

My personal point of view is that generally television is a good thing but it really depends of what we are watching and how mach time we spent in front of TV. In this case I would like to repeat the statement of one famous TV-moderator Günther Jauch who sad that watching TV make stupid people even more stupid and clever people even more clever.


Viele Grüße, Janna

[hexe3967]

Hier ist mein Korrekturvorschlag.

[tiorthan]

Wenn du Korrekturen schreibst, stell sie bitte direkt ins Forum und nicht als Datei.

[zhanna]

Vieeeelen vielen Dank...das ist sehr hilfreich!