Kurze Geschichte über eine Person: Bitte korrigieren!!

[spikey]

Hallo zusammen

Ich musste in Englisch über eine Freundin von mir schreiben, eine Geschichte in Englisch und nun brauche ich eine Person die mir meine Geschichte korrigieren kann-->die gut Englisch schreiben kann, womöglich auch noch was gutes dazuhinfügt, bessere Wörter etc??? Ich bitte wenn möglich bis am Mittwoch mir dies zu korrigieren weil ich es dann abgeben muss. PS: Mein lehrer meinte selbst ich sollte es zuerst von einer Person die gut Englisch kann korrigieren lassen, von dem her kein problem. ;=)

VIELEN DANK FÜR DAS LESEN UND KORRIGIEREN

Her name is ****. She was born on 17.10.1991 in Switzerland, more exactly said in ****. She has a brother and a sister. They are younger than she. Her brother Ruben is 6 years old and he visits the kindergarten. Her sister **** is 12 years old and she against goes to school.
Christine is called their mother. She is a food shop assistant. Her father is an Italian and he work as a computer scientist and as an accountant.



***´s favourite subjects are mathematics, humans and environment and history, but not always.
She doesn´t like sports, chemistry and keyboard letter.
In her freetime she has fun with friends, she loves to hear music, shopping, watching tv, go to the cinema, travelling and sleep out.
She has many character characteristics: ambitiously, purposefully, helpfully, honestly, spontaneously and reservedly!
She has blond-brown hair, green-blue eyes and she measures 1.79m.



After summer holidays she becomes a specialized employee health in the hospital here in ****. For she it is very practical because she must only run over a road and then she is there. Simply super for her!! If she has finished her formation in three years she would like to make a further formation as a nurse.
Her dream is it once to fly to America for a year in the following countries: Los Angeles, New York, Miami, San Francisco and California.
Further journeys she wants to visit are Egypt, Dubai, Moscow, Caribic, Sweden, Mexico and Canada.
Later, she would have a family with maximally 1 child. She wouldn´t like to marry too old-->(>30)!!!
A cosy dwelling that would be also beautiful but without a garden, unterstands itself.

This was the story about her.

[rosettastone]

Hallo spikey
Her name ist ****. She was born on 17.10.1991 in Switzerland, more exactly said in ****. She has a brother and a sister. They are younger than her. Her brother Ruben is 6 years old and he visits the kindergarten. Her sister **** is 12 years old and she goes to school Their mother is called Christine. She works in a grocery store (du meinst ja lebenmittelladen oder ?). Her father is italian. He works as a computer scientist and as an accountant. ***´s favourite subjects in school are mathematics, humans(welches Fach meinst du damit ?) and environment and also history, but not always.
She doesn´t like sports, chemistry and keyboard letter. (meinst du informatik ?)In her freetime she likes having fun with friends, she loves listening to music, shopping, watching tv, going to the cinema, travelling and sleeping late.(falls du ausschlafen meinst)She ambitious, purposefull, helpfull, honest, spontaneous and reserved!
She has blond-brown hair, green-blue eyes and is 1.79m tall.After the summer holidays she is going to work as a specialized health employee in the hospital here in ****. For her it is very practical because she must only cross the road and then she is there. Simply super for her!! If she has finished her training( formation heisst Ausbildung im Sinne von die Ausbildung von Rissen in einer Mauer z.B.) in three years she would like to make a further training as a nurse.It is her dream to spend a year in the Usa some day. Especially the following places: Los Angeles, New York, Miami, San Francisco and California.Further places she wants to visit are Egypt, Dubai, Moscow, the carribean, Sweden, Mexico and Canada.Later, she would like to have a family with 1 child at the most. She wouldn´t like to marry too old-->(>30)!!!A cosy dwelling that would be also beautiful but without a garden, ist self understood for her.
Liebe Grüsse

[spikey]

dankeschÖÖÖön

hehe ja ich meinte tastaturschreiben als fach!??
HmMm ja ausschlafen meinte ich auch